Comments for chronicles of irene http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com the fictionalized saga of aunt irene Wed, 20 Aug 2008 04:54:16 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=MU Comment on Irene, 1930 : [1] by lynn doiron http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/irene-1/#comment-26 lynn doiron Fri, 15 Aug 2008 19:05:57 +0000 http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/?page_id=53#comment-26 I changed the tense regarding listing of Alex traits. I liked it better before changes, but I think tense was off. I tell you what ----> writing ain't for sissies. I changed the tense regarding listing of Alex traits. I liked it better before changes, but I think tense was off. I tell you what —-> writing ain’t for sissies.

]]> Comment on Irene, 1930 : [1] by lynn doiron http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/irene-1/#comment-25 lynn doiron Thu, 14 Aug 2008 17:25:55 +0000 http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/?page_id=53#comment-25 BUT -- you see, as I was just reading this again, I wondered if I had "tense" problems in opening P. BUT — you see, as I was just reading this again, I wondered if I had “tense” problems in opening P.

]]> Comment on Irene, 1930 : [1] by lavonnew http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/irene-1/#comment-24 lavonnew Thu, 14 Aug 2008 17:09:41 +0000 http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/?page_id=53#comment-24 The first paragraph is great. Before, I was a little confused about her brother. Putting that information in at the beginning cleared it up for me. The second paragraph is so vivid! (As well as the rest, but the second paragraph puts me in the moment.) I can almost twirl that mustachio myself! The glare on the cane, tops it off. With those few words I am both in the audience and Foster because I now know that Foster is adept at creating a spectacle to astound audiences. This section is very polished and written in such an interesting way. This reader is captivated. Your skill with concise description sets you apart. The first paragraph is great. Before, I was a little confused about her brother. Putting that information in at the beginning cleared it up for me.

The second paragraph is so vivid! (As well as the rest, but the second paragraph puts me in the moment.) I can almost twirl that mustachio myself! The glare on the cane, tops it off. With those few words I am both in the audience and Foster because I now know that Foster is adept at creating a spectacle to astound audiences.

This section is very polished and written in such an interesting way. This reader is captivated. Your skill with concise description sets you apart.

]]> Comment on . . . Table of Contents by lavonnew http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com#comment-23 lavonnew Thu, 14 Aug 2008 16:54:05 +0000 http://itcouldabeen.wordpress.com/?page_id=9#comment-23 First off, I love the postcard picture! I can imagine the lady in yellow as Irene, readying herself for the shoot. First off, I love the postcard picture! I can imagine the lady in yellow as Irene, readying herself for the shoot.

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